Becoming a Whisper by Joe Odey

Becoming a Whisper

Genre Poetry.

Blurb “In his first full-length poetry collection, Joe Odey takes us on an absolutely exhilarating journey through a myriad of emotions from the first page turn all through to the end. Each poem feels like a story, channeling your emotions with as few words as possible and helping you bring meaning to feelings you have always had bubbling under the surface. This collection weaves its way thematically through emotions we can all connect with – love, loss, heartbreak, death, exhilaration, triumph, commitment, rebellion, regret, nostalgia, despair, loneliness and renewed hope. At times, it almost feels like a conversation with one’s self…gently pondering the things that your heart holds dear and finding that, in the end, the whispers from your heart have all the answers you’ve been longing for.”

Themes Love and its antithesis, Death, Loss, Despair, Hope, Joy, Heartbreak and Grief.

Editing Well edited.

What worked?

Mo After reading a few uninspiring prose this year, I was ready for some poetry, then I got cold feet when it was time to read this collection of poems. Before I start the review, I’ll say I’ve enjoyed my journey of reading poetry so far. It’s good to know that there several ways to write and enjoy poetry.

Becoming a Whisper is a collection of 100 poems which covers a range of emotions. Each poem muses on a specific issue. I reckon there is a poem for almost every thought you have had in your head but can’t articulate properly. You know, those thoughts that never become words on a page.

The book is not arranged in any order or grouped into parts as other poets do. The poems are preceded by silhouettes relevant to the poems, this breaks the long collection of poems and helps with the visual imagery of the words. Most of the poems are short (thank God!), except for some earlier ones. Being short helps me digest each poem quickly and still have enough time to ruminate on them.

The first poem, Becoming describes Joe’s intention to write this collection. Almost like opening a window into his thoughts.

One of my many favourites is The Loudest Whisper:

She embraced silence

Not because she had nothing to say.

No. Far from it!

She embraced silence

Because the world wasn’t ready

For what she had to say.

In A Love Story, the promise of love is renewed. In The Evil We Seek, humanity’s paradox is laid bare. A Place We Called Home is self-reflective and an inquiry into our neglect of important issues.

I love the sequencing of the last five poems; Letters to Ada I-IV and Gone. Each letter (although it doesn’t read like a letter) conveys the feeling of a newly found love and we see the decline with each succeeding letter and finally the loss of love in Gone.

I like how it’s easy to connect to the words as the language used was simple enough. This book is to be enjoyed in bits to savour the words and the intent behind each poem.

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Lady B Becoming a Whisper is a collection of 100 free verse poems interspersed with pictures. The pictures break up the text though it was confusing as some preceded poems and others succeeded poems. We had a review copy so hopefully, the layout in the book is less confusing.

From the blurb, Joe had a clear idea of what the poetry collection is and he achieves what he set out to do – take the reader through stories expressed in as few words as possible.

The first few poems in this collection set the tone for the rest of the book. I’ll highlight a few of the poems which were memorable. The book opens with Becoming, a short poem about the release one gets from writing. It reminded me of the many unaddressed letters I wrote to people who hurt me when I was younger. A cathartic outlet.

Edge of Paradise about suicide conveys the despair and desperation of the character yet I felt like the end treated the subject with levity.

Ochanya’s Faces is about the public façade the character wears to mask her private troubles. This is a thread of thought common to several poems in this collection. This poem uses similes which bring it alive:

Like the sparkly flame of a match to fire,

She lit up most rooms. Effortless. Unmatched.

Her warm laughter, like wild fire spread.

Impossible to ignore, impossible to begrudge.

In Memoriam is a tribute to a once passionate relationship which has now ended. Another common thread of thought which runs through this collection is the end of once passionate relationships. As I’ve said before, I like poems about love but I like poems about heartbreak even more.

But fire does what fire does, it burns!

Here lay a scorched bond

Today’s reality…a charred smile

Empty, dire, ash

A Cold Pillow and Our Guardian Angel are about death and grief. These poems convey the emotions vividly.

Another thread which runs in several poems is the constraints of societal norms and morality. In these poems such as That We May Live Again, Joe advocates that the characters break free from these constraints and be free!

Little Things struck a chord. It’s a short poem about staying in touch with the little things, the joy bearers. The thoughts expressed there are relatable. “For time and again we are reminded, \ That the big moments \ Only leave us empty and hungrier still.”

In A Lifetime about goodbyes, Joe queries; “Who invented goodbyes? \ So much hurt and pain, \ And you chose to call it ‘good’?” I looked up the etymology of the word, goodbye years ago and discovered that it was a shortened form of God be with ye with God changed to good because of confusion with phrases like good morning. So Joe, that’s where the ‘good’ is from. 🙂

Daybreak about how the world goes on around you, whether your own world has stopped, is poignant. Many have felt this way at some point, especially those who have lost close family or friends. I felt this way when I lost my mother.

Overall, Becoming a Whisper is a collection which is simple to understand and easy to relate to. There were only 2 poems which I thought were chewy though I liked both, Broken Mirrors and Requiem. If you are one of those who struggle with traditional poetry, this collection will work for you.

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What didn’t work?

Mo I don’t think that there’s a one template for how poems should be written but it helps me when they are grouped. And because I read it at a go, it felt like I was running around the place, jumping from one emotion to another without a break.

Lady B I think the collection should have been divided into parts. It was at times disconcerting to jump from a poem about death to a poem about orgasms.

Some of the poems were repetitive. Perhaps, because they had a common thread running through them. They felt familiar but not in a good way.

What I like about poetry is the conveying of thoughts in as few words as possible and the use of figures of speech to bring the words alive. For me, the second part was missing in this collection. The simplicity of this collection is both its strength and its weakness.

Page numbers 148.

Publisher Self-published.

Damage $3.15 (Kindle) $6.99 (Paperback) on Amazon.

Rating 7/10.

Becoming a Whisper is available on Amazon.

Many thanks, Joe for sending us a review copy in exchange for an honest review.

Which do you prefer – free verse poems or traditional poems? Please share your thoughts in the comments section.

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  1. Thank you so much, Mo & Lady B, for your candid & extremely honest feedback. These are exactly the types of reviews that actually help writers improve & better connect with their audience. Please keep this immense service going. I’m thrilled for the opportunity to feature . Wish you both the best!

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  2. To answer your question.

    The more traditional elements one subtracts from a poem, the closer it gets to the border between poetry and prose. At the absolute border stands the “prose poem” – which is simply short prose written for the reasons people usually write poems.

    Free verse is deeper within poetic territory because it is still written in lines. Simply writing in lines requires a specifically attuned consciousness. As an editor I’ve had people send me poems that were strictly chopped into meter, but oddly enough the units of meaning were still prose sentences rather than poetic lines. I reject those.

    All that to say, Vers Libre was invented about 140 years ago and is firmly established within the poetic tradition.

    Why do so many traditionally-minded people object to it, then? As a traditionally-minded person myself, I think I can answer that. Poetic forms, such as the sonnet – such as Free Verse – are to poetry what different instruments are to music. So, to try an extended analogy: imagine that someday it is collectively decided by orchestra leaders the world over that we’ll never have any instruments in any orchestras, ever again, but the slide whistle. Tuba players shall be blasted as atavistic cranks; percussionists shall be drummed out of town; and violinists shall be found strangled with symbolic cat-gut. All orchestras from now on shall be slide-whistle orchestras.

    Then, let’s suppose that all the really knowing people who decide this also decide to never, ever admit that they’ve actually made this decision. When hiring instrumentalists, they shall interview and audition every qualified candidate and insist that they are making the decision based upon merit. Then, they shall just happen to hire slide whistlers, and them only. Alas, they will say to the newspapers, no one really plays a quality oboe or trombone anymore. If they did, we’d hire them. But they just sound so silly and dramatic and overly-emotional. No one actually has the feelings Beethoven wrote into his symphonies; every emotion a normal human being can safely experience is completely expressible by a slide-whistle.

    About 75 years later, when no one has heard a cello in decades if ever, it would start to actually be true – if you did hear a cellist playing in the subway or in the mall at Christmas time you’d smile tightly, hurry past, and think, “Learn to code, why don’t you!”

    Except for a few tragic souls. Let’s say there are people born with the capacity for enormous musical appreciation. They crave to fill up the spaces in their heads with a huge range of sound; every kind of beauty; every depth and height of feeling. They have emotions, or are capable of understanding emotions, that a slide whistle simply can’t convey. What about this person?

    He stops slack-jawed in the mall, staring at the cellist, and thinks, “My God, I never knew it could be like this.” And he weeps.

    Slide-whistle orchestras don’t serve the aesthetically gifted. And neither does free verse. Free verse doesn’t just eschew rhyme and rhythm. Most importantly of all, it eschews “poetic diction.”

    Poetic diction is when the poet uses a special way of talking that he wouldn’t use in ordinary conversation. He does it because there are feelings and there are outlying regions of beauty that cannot be served by quotidian, ruminative speech. Poetic diction is the whole point of poetry, for those who are poetically gifted.

    And the whole scenario about the orchestra leaders deciding collectively to only hire slide whistles? That actually happened in the poetic world. Due to a misunderstanding of Wordsworth’s complaint about overly mannered poets, the powers of the poetic world purposefully and systematically destroyed poetic diction in just the manner I’ve described – by shadowbanning artists who use heightened language and by only publishing those who write conversationally.

    There’s nothing wrong with a slide whistle. And there’s nothing wrong with free verse. Until free verse is all you ever read, and everyone looks down on you for needing something more.

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      • The question about preference for free verse or traditional poetry. I’m saying that free verse is actually part of the tradition, but it’s true that traditionally minded people, oid which I am one, favor it less.

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      • Oh okay, I now understand. I think I’m getting more comfortable with free verse. I struggled in the beginning because poetry as taught in schools still favours traditional poems. It took years after schooling for me to read poems again and at first I found free verse poems too unusual and too close to prose for comfort. Now, I’m more accepting of them and enjoy the well-written ones. Thanks again for sharing your thoughts.

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